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The table and chart below show the time spent at leisure and household activities in Britain.

The table and chart below show the time spent at leisure and household activities in Britain.
The table compares the amount of
time
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 spent on various leisure activities,
while
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 the bar chart illustrates the average
time
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 devoted to household tasks in Britain in a particular year.
Overall
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, it is evident that
men
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 spent more
time
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 on leisure activities,
whereas
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women
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 dedicated a greater portion of their day to household chores.
According to
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 the table,
men
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 spent the most
time
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 on technical leisure activities
such
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 as watching TV, videos, or listening to the radio, averaging 137
minutes
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 per day.
In contrast
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, they spent much less
time
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 reading (18
minutes
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) and participating in sports (15
minutes
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).
Similarly
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,
women
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also
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 devoted a substantial amount of
time
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 to watching TV and listening to the radio (118
minutes
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 daily), but their
time
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 for reading and sports was slightly lower, at 19 and 11
minutes
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 respectively. Turning to the bar chart,
women
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 clearly allocated much more
time
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 to domestic tasks than
men
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. They spent just under 80
minutes
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 on cooking and washing, around 33
minutes
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 shopping, 30
minutes
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 ironing, and about 10
minutes
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 on repairs.
By contrast
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,
men
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 devoted far less
time
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 to most of these activities—around 30
minutes
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 for cooking, 25
minutes
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 for shopping, and only 10
minutes
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 for ironing.
However
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, they spent roughly 20
minutes
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 on repair work, twice as much as
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women
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the women
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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