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Writing Samples
Band 3

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people
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 that
science
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manily foucse
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mainly focus
 on developing human
life
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,
while
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believes
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believe
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 that we can
use
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science
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 for different
purposess
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purposes
.
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agree
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agrees
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 with the first statement, for two main reasons
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 improving our
life
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our
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 demand or goal in
life
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, and by developing our
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life
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life,
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then
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 can have the ability to search for
happiens
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happiness
as
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, as
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this
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what
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is what
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 most people want.
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 with, why
we should
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should we
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imporve
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improve
 our
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 rather than using
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.
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science
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their
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lives
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, but
also
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 we
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 it beside us
not
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, not
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 against us,
for instance
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, look
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at
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 the
nueculer
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nuclear
 bomb, and how much
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ruined
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 our
lives
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. As the two bombs dropped in Japan, and
destoryed
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destroyed
two cities and
kill
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killed
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thousedns
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thousands
 of people, and
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caused harm
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harm more
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more harm
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. So why
we would
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would we
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use
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science
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 to develop
somethings
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something
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 like
this
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.
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Furthermore
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, we can
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science
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lives
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 in positive way, like look to technology we have now, without
science
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 we aren't capable to do any of
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, and
this
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 invitation can lead to us to a significant imporvment in our
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, and even necessary things like medicence or prevent us from diseases, by using
science
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 as we had seen
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 in our
lives
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. In conclusion, we can
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science
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 for different reasons
, if
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 we
use
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it properly
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properly
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properly,
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 we can see a huge benefit
from thorugh
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throughout
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 our
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life
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lives
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.

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planning
Plan your essay with one main idea per paragraph and a short intro and a closing line.
structure
Say your view in the first sentence and keep it clear through the whole essay.
accuracy
Use correct spell and grammar. Check small errors that make the meaning hard to read.
content
Give better and more fit examples that tie to your point.
coherence
Link ideas with simple and clear words so the flow is easy to follow.
Strength
The writer shows a clear view.
Strength
Basic reasons are given for the view.
Strength
Some basic flow between ideas is seen.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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