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Band 3

Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Is this a positive or negative development?

THERE IS NO DENYING THE FACT IT IS CRUCIAL TO HAVE YOUR
MONEY
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 WHEREVER YOU GO IN CASE YOU NEEDED TO BUY
SOMTHING
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SOMETHING
 OR SOMETIMES TO ENTER OR PARK IN ANY SPOT.
WHILE
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 IT IS A COMMONLY HELD BELIEF THAT IT IS MORE POPULAR TO HAVE
A
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PLASTIC
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MONEY
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MONEY,
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 THAT KNOWN AS CREDIT OR DEBIT CARDS
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, CURRENLTLY
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CURRENLTLY
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CURRENTLY
INSTEAD
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 OF
ACCTUAL
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ACTUAL
 PAPER
MONEY
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, THERE IS
ALSO
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 AN ARGUMENT THAT BANKNOTES AND COINS ARE BECOMING LESS VIRAL.
THIS
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 ESSAY WILL ANALYSE
THIS
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 TOPIC FROM BOTH POINTS OF VIEW AND EXPRESS MY OPINION. ON ONE HAND, CREDIT CARDS ARE SIGNIFICANTLY CONVENIENT AND TINY
,
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IT
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they
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COULD BE
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can be
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 HELD EVERYWHERE. YOU DON`T NEED A HALL BAG TO CARRY
IT
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IT.
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,
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 ALL YOU NEED IS A POCKET.
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, IT IS A PERFECT
WAY SIZE
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 TO AVOID GETTING ROBBED. FOR
EXAPMLE
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, HAVING A 1000
DOLLAR IN
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dollar
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THE CARD
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card
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 MAKE
MONEY
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 APPARENTLY
INVISISBLE
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invisible
WHICH
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, WHICH
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 IS GOOD TO TACKLE A POTENTIAL
ROB CRIME
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robbery crime
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.
ON THE OTHER HAND
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, BANKNOTES AND COINS SEEM TO BE UNVIRAL TO CARRY WITH THE TECHNOLOGY INDUSTRY NOWADAYS. IT IS
ALSO
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 POSSIBLE TO SAY THAT
,
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 PEOPLE WANT TO FEEL COMFORTABLE NOW MORE THAN EVER.
MOREOVER
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,
CRIME RATE AND PEOPLE
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CRIME RATE AND PEOPLE'S
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 CONSCIOUSNESS ARE INCREASING
,
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 IT IS RARELY TO SEE ANYONE CARRYING MUCH
MONEY
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. IN CONCLUSION, THERE ARE NO EASY ANSWERS TO
THIS
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 QUESTION. ON BALANCE,
HOWEVER
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, I TEND TO BELIEVE THAT EACH ONE HAS
IT`S
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ITS
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 CONS AND PROS, BUT IT IS
MORE
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SAFE TO USE A PLASTIC
MONEY
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.

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structure
Plan what you will say first. A short intro, two ideas in body, and a short end.
coherence
Make sure each idea has a clear topic sentence.
coherence
Use simple linking words like 'also', 'but', 'so' to join ideas.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar; fix big errors that make words hard to read.
content
The writing shows a clear view and uses signpost words like 'On one hand' and 'In conclusion'.
structure
There is an ending that repeats the view.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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