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Some people believe that citizens should pay higher taxes so that the government can improve public services such as schools and roads. Others think that high taxes are unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Several communities think that the executive power should have an outcome from
humans
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 payments in which to have access
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 services like fixing schools and roads.
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, a few think large fiscal charges are not the greatest thing. There are
people
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 who consider that all individuals must
implicate themselves
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 by giving away
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amount
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portion
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 of money from their salaries in order to contribute
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 the
wellbeing
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 of a town,
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 others disagree about that. From my perspective, the least thing a citizen could do is help their state by doing anything they can.
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: building something useful or
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 some money for creating a
well developed
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 city.
This
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 essay will focus on pointing out both views and ideas.
Firstly
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, one main idea is the cooperation between the government and citizens in order to develop a
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 of respect that would attract
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 to become more helpful when it comes to their home country.
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 everybody, a country must stay together and
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make sacrifices, and
as a result
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 to have a beautiful town with great things.
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instance
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inovative
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innovative
 architecture and
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well organised
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 places with wonderful attractions.
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, certain
people
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 might think
otherwise
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. It is known that everywhere anyone could go, there will be humans who think about themselves only. In
this
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 case, high taxes can induce problems,
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 as negative feelings or having a bad influence on our future generation,which is wrong. Of course, everyone has their own opinion, but
people
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 should think more about contributing
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 help because
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 the end of the day, they will be the ones who complain about the bad driveways or the poor education.
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, many individuals are in charge of how they make up decisions.Even though it is hard for everybody to pay higher taxes, our future is in our hands ,and it depends on us ,
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 we would like to live in it.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a clear view. Then give two sides with one example for each, and end with a short view again.
coherence
Link ideas well. Use words like First, Also, But, However, In conclusion to show how ideas go.
content
Give clear, small examples for each point. Do not run long in one idea; keep simple facts.
idea
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the topic.
structure
It ends with a view and a short idea of what to do next.
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