The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate the 3 different layouts of West
Park
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Secondary
School
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over the
60
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past 60
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years.
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, it is clearly seen that, in 1950
school
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complex accounted for 25% housing area and 25% farmland of its total plot.
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, in 1980 and 2010 maps show that
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these areas were
subsituted
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substituted
by other facilities.
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,
northern
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the northern
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main road remained
same
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the same
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. In 1950,
diagram
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the diagram
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depicts that
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the school
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school
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school's
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total area
divided
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was divided
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equally
4
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into 4
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parts and each part
were
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was
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situated south of the main road. These parts were houses,
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school
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a school
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,
farmland
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a farmland
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and
playground
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a playground
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for children. In 1980,
layout
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the layout
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houses
section
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replaced
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was replaced
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by
car
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a car
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park
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and
science
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a science
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block
section
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equally;
similarly
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farmland
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also
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was also
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chanced
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changed
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to
sports
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a sports
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field.
Furthermore
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,
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the school
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school
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school's
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main building
divided
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is divided
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and
science
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the science
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block
set
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is set
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aside
the
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from the
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main block. In 2010,
map
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the map
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shows that, car
park
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section
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increased its field.
Also
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sports field
reduced
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was reduced
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in size
and
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, and
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play
ground
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playground
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section
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placed
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was placed
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in it.
To sum up
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, over the
dacedes
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decades
,
begining
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beginning
constitution of West
Park
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Secondary
School
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layout
chanced
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changed
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a lot
throughout
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as
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the
rising
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apply
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needs

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school, section with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • renovation
  • expansion
  • modernization
  • infrastructure
  • landscape
  • facade
  • demolition
  • construction
  • alteration
  • amenities
  • accessibility
  • sustainability
  • curriculum
  • enrollment
  • pedagogy
  • architecture
  • commute
  • heritage preservation
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