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The table illustrates the percentages of students attending four types of secondary schools between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table illustrates the percentages of students attending four types of secondary schools between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The table illustrates the percentages of
students
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 attending four types of secondary
schools
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 between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the proportions of
students
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 attending Specialist, Grammar, and Voluntary-controlled
schools
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 declined over the period,
while
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 the percentage of
students
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 in Community
schools
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 increased steadily. Notably, Voluntary-controlled
schools
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 had the highest attendance in 2000,
whereas
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 by 2009, Community
schools
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 became the most popular. In detail, the percentage of
students
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 in Specialist
schools
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 started at 12% in 2000 and fell slightly to 11% in 2005, before dropping
further
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 to 10% in 2009.
Similarly
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, Grammar
schools
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 showed a steady decline from 24% in 2000 to 19% in 2005 and
then
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 to 12% in 2009. The proportion of
students
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 in Voluntary-controlled
schools
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also
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 decreased significantly, from 52% in 2000 to 38% in 2005, and
finally
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 to 20% in 2009.
By contrast
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, Community
schools
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 experienced a dramatic rise. Their share of
students
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 grew from 12% in 2000 to 38% in 2005, and
then
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 climbed
further
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 to 58% in 2009, making them the most attended school type by the end of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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