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The graph belowshows the numberofoverseas visitors who wentto the UKfor differentpurposes between 1989 and2009. Summarise the informationby selecting and'eeorting themain features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph belowshows the numberofoverseas visitors who wentto the UKfor differentpurposes between 1989 and2009. Summarise the informationby selecting and'eeorting themain features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
n
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In
 the graph we can see that
diferent
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different
visitors
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 came to the UK for
business
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, holiday, and other reasons between 1989 and 2009
years
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apply
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. Information starts
since
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in
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 1989
year
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and shows us how many
visitors
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 went and what
was their reason
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their reason was
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. In 1989 for
business
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 arrived 5
millions
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million
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 human
,
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apply
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 for holiday came 6.5
visitors
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, and just meeting friends and relatives 3.5 million.
Unfortunately
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Unfortunately,
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 between 1989 and 1994 years
visitors
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 for
business
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was
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were
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 lower than in 1989
but
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, but
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 after
1993
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1993,
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Linking Words
this
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these
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 results
is
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apply
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change
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changed
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.
Other
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The other
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 line shows us that
visitors
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 for "Meeting friends and relatives" grow until 2009 and
fell
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fall
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down
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apply
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after.
Visitor
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Visitors
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 for
business
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actualy
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actually
 in the beginning
was
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were
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 very low
but
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, but
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 after 1993
had
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started higger potention for
grow
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growth
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 until 2009. Numbers for holiday
visitors
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not
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did not
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 stay and
had been
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were
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diferent
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different
this
Linking Words
 period, because his line
not
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was not
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 usual. In
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conclusion
conclucion
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conclucion,
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 we can use information from
this
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 graph for
open
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an open
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 travel agency

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, business with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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