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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

These maps illustrate how Grange
Park
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 has changed since 1920.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
park
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 has changed a lot during
this
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 period. Some facilities in the
park
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 were relocated.
For instance
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, there were three rose gardens in the
plan
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. Two of them were on top of the map, and one of them was located in the bottom right of the
plan
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. After that, the fountain was replaced by a huge Rose Garden in the middle of the
park
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.
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, all the sitting areas were relocated to be around the garden.
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, some recreational activities were added to the complex.
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, the stage for musicians was destroyed.
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, a huge Amphitheatre for concerts was constructed in that place.
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, the pond for water plants was demolished, and a new water feature was made in the bottom right corner of the
plan
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. The glasshouse was removed. A children's play area was created
instead
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 of a pond for children.
Apart from
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this
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, two entrances from Elden Street and Arnold Avenue remained unchanged,
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 a new underground car
park
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 was built in the right corner of the
plan
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. All in all,
it is clear that
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 Grange
Park
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 had a lot of changes after renovation.

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task
Be clear on what was in 1920 and what is now. Start with a short view of the whole change, then name the main parts.
task
Use small parts. Make 3 small blocks: intro, changes, end. Each block has one main idea.
coherence
Show changes in a calm order. Group text by things like plants, water, gates, and by places such as entrances and the car park. Use words like then, next, and also to link ideas.
coherence
Use easy names for things: rose garden, pond, stage, entrance, car park, play area. Keep talk simple and exact.
positive
The first line shows the topic.
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There is an overall view of change at the end.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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