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The maps below show changes to the ground floor plan of a university department in 2000 and 2015.

The maps below show changes to the ground floor plan of a university department in 2000 and 2015.
The given layouts illustrate how the ground floor of a university building changed over a 30-year period, between 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 the area underwent significant changes throughout the period.
While
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 the number of new seminar
rooms
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 and, new IT centre were built, the green area was completely removed. In 1980, it was a road in the centre of the plan, whilst on the northern side it was a department, with three seminar
rooms
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, the library and the office.
Furthermore
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, on the east side, it was a huge green space
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 with various types of plants. By 2010, several major changes had taken place. One of them was the addition of two seminar
rooms
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.
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, the library was removed,
whereas
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 the office was expanded.
According to
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 details, between the main road and to office, a new car park.
Finally
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, the open space was converted into a small building, with two main
rooms
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, an IT centre and a library, and a corridor.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rooms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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