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Writing Samples
Band 4

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that
water
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 is a basic human right and governments should provide clean
water
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 to everyone without charge, just free. I completely agree with
this
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 statement because clean
water
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 is a significant resource for getting better
health
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, food, and
to improve
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improving
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 the quality of
life
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. On the one hand, people cannot live with dirty
water
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. Foods need clean
water
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 to prepare healthy food. Clean
water
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 is the most important thing that people need to live a good
life
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.
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, if we do not have good resources for clean
water
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, we can't treat patients.
Additionally
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, there are many
researches
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research
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in
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studies in
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New
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the New
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 York
times
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Times
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they
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. They
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 published a statement about
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the detrimentals
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detrimentals
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detrimental
of
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effects of
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 dirty
water
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 in Africa in 2012
, about
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. About
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 42% of
resedents
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residents
 of Africa
they
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apply
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lost their
life
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 because they
don't
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couldn't
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 find a good
resource
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source
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 of
water
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 except rain. On
other
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the other
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 hand, if states can
provied
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provide
 free
water
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 to all
houses
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houses,
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 it will be
useful
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a useful
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 and great decision
but
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, but
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 it is not implemented.
Although
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 providing
water
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 for free may lead to
consumption
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apply
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a lot and loss without paying attention to its value, but still
a
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apply
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significant to get clean
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as
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water as
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 well as free
water
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 to enhance our community with
a
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apply
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great
health
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 and
life
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.
For example
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, when we obtain
a
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apply
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free
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water
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water,
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 we can cook a delicious food
and
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, and
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this
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 is the most
things
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important things
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 to preserve our
health
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. In conclusion, it is
importance
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important
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 to obtain a good
resources
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source
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 of clean
water
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and
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apply
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for free,
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this
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as this
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 is
because
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for
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 our
health
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 and
life
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.

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Task Response
Your position is clear, but you should add strong, true facts to back it. Check facts you give.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make every paragraph have one main idea. Improve grammar and word order to help the reader.
Task Response
You show a clear view that free water should be for all.
Task Response
You give some reasons about health and life effects.
Coherence and Cohesion
You use signpost words like 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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