Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead. Discuss both sides ang give your opinion.
Nowadays, some people believe that having a degree is mandatory to get a tremendous job;
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experience without
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. Both viewpoints
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their own pros and cons which I will discuss in
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having a university degree opens various pathways for individuals.
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structure
Plan a clear path. Start with a short intro that says you will discuss both views and your view. Use two body parts to show each side, with a clear reason.
grammar
Use simple and correct words. Fix obvious errors like studing → studying and emphasize on → emphasize. Use 'on the other hand' to show contrast.
content
Give one or two small examples to show why degree or work can help. This is a key part of task response.
structure
Finish with a short conclusion that repeats your view and the main idea from both sides.
content
The essay shows an attempt to discuss a task with an opinion
language
Linking words such as however and in my opinion are used
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. This is becoming a serious concern for the education system.
Approach to addressing environmental issues often divides opinions. There is a widespread ideology that environmental challenges should be countered on a global scale, while others think that it is a national issue and must be solved inside the nation itself. It is a debatable topic with many contrasting viewpoints. This essay will discuss both sides and elaborate on my opinion at the end.
It is widely believed that renting a residence instead of purchasing their own house is the best way nowadays. In my opinion, this trend brings more drawbacks than merits and the reasons will be discussed as follows.
There is no denying that employment methods involve essential procedures. Although many believe that the traditional interview process is not the best option, I strongly disagree with this view.
Nowadays, a significant increase in migrants to cities with a hope of better settlement is a big concern for societies around the world. The shortage of well-paid jobs in rural communities compels workers to immigrate to megacities with the purpose of better earnings for living. Unfortunately, job vacancies offered by manufacturing and service businesses require proficiency qualifications from applicants and the cost of living in general extremely high compared with their low incomes. I believe that two of the major causes for difficulty in city settlement are job opportunities and extremely high cost of real estate. However, central governments have also developed a number of long-term effective solutions to save the situation.