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Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organization to continue their development. On the other hand, others think that practical aid or advice is more useful. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Recently, it has been argued that
third world
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countries
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 require immense financial aid from International
organizations
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 to develop their
countries
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,
while
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 others think
some
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that some
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 practical
assistants
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are
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is
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 more beneficial. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion about
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 issue.
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 with, developing
countries
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 have some limitations in their
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 strength. Most infrastructures in
third world
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countries
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are insufficiently
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insufficiently
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cover
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 their people's needs.
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, in Ghana, the government is unable to build some harbours to deliver their fisheries resources to other
countries
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therefore
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 Ghana will ask the IMF
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, as
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 an international monetary
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organisation
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organization
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organization,
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 to provide financial aid.
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, Ghana will gain beneficial infrastructures for their country, and create better
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 benefits.
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, practical assistants provide more advantages to developing
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 because International
organizations
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organisations
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 usually have some experts who have
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 speciality
in particular
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 issues.
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, Indonesia
recently has
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a
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grand design to build a large dam in East Java. To
maximize
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 the outputs, the government established a party with JICA (Japan International
Corporate
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Agencies
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) to build
these
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 infrastructure to gain an optimal result in the future.
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, International
organization
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organisations
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is
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are
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 beneficial for several
countries
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 to assist the
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economic
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 goals, and they
also
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 have resources to help developing
countries
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to
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apply
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build a major infrastructure development.

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content
The essay tries to cover both sides of the issue.
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Specific places (Ghana, Indonesia) and groups (IMF, JICA) are used as examples.
structure
There is an ending that aims to give a view.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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