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You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an appartment. You left the department in good condition but the landlord won’t return the deposit. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: -Explain why you are writing -Ask for the return of your deposit -Inform the landlord of possible legal action.

Dear Mr Singh, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am Harjeet Kaur, and I am one of your tenants, who
had
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 been renting
a
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 apartment at 197 Fallingdale Crescent. I am writing
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 letter to show dissatisfaction regarding the refundable deposit that I
did
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have
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 not get it till now. As per the agreement,
If
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if
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 I
left
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leave
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 the apartment in
a
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good condition,
then
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 I will be eligible to get
full
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a full
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 refund later. As
,
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 I already left the apartment,
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 month
in
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 the same condition
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 as it was before.
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, till now I
did
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have
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 not
obtain
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 my amount back.
Its
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 my humble request to you, please return
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 amount as soon as possible. Because
,
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 I do not want to take any legal action against you, as you
know
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know,
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 our bonds are not only like a family member, but
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 as a close friend during that period of time. I will await
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your positive response, and I hope you will understand the situation in a correct way. Yours sincerely, Harjeet Kaur.

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task response
Say the aim in one clear line at the start.
task response
Give the amount of money and the date the room was left.
tone
Keep the tone calm and polite, not harsh.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph. Separate intro, body, and end.
tone
Polite tone, good respect to the landlord.
content
The letter asks for return of the money clearly.
structure
It gives the reason for the request.
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