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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people prefer to eat meals at restaurants, while others like to prepare and eat food in their own home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

It is often argued
wether its
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whether it's
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 better to eat meals at restaurants or prepare the
food
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 and eat it
in
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at
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home
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. Personally ,
i
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I
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 prefer eating
food
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 in my
home
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 since
its
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it's
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 more reliable ,
strengthen
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strengthens
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 the unity of
family
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the family
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, healthier and cheaper . Eating
food
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 in homes with family is often
corrleate
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correlated
 with specific memories that are
unforgetable
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unforgettable
. Most of my beautiful memories are linked with eating with my family
in
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at
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home
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 .
Furthermore
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 , eating meals at
home
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 is more reliable than restaurants . Take my self as an example , 2 years ago , i went to very common restaruants with my friends , the tasty was not that bad ,
however
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 , the devastating consequnces happened after that day , i was vulnerable to very serious desase because of
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 restaurant , and since that time , i decided to eat only domestic
food
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 with my family since its more reliable .
Additonally
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Additionally
, eating domestic
food
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 provides you with healthy and tasty
food
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 . My brother
who
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 is
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an athelte
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athelte
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athlete
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,
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always
prefer
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prefers
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 to
intake
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eat
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 domestic
food
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 since he
belive
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believes
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 that
its more
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it's
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healthy
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healthier
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.
Moreover
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 , it is commonly
believe
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believed
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 that restaurants are quite expensive compared with domestic
food
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 .
Additionally
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 ,
i
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I
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 prefer eating at
home
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 because
i
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I
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 like to be alone when
i
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I
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am
eating
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eating,
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 because some factors like noisy places will spoil the fun . In conclusion , as far as
i
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I
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 am
concern
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concerned
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,
i
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I
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 believe that eating
in
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at
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home
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 is much better because
its
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it
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 not only provides you with
unforgetable
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unforgettable
 memories , it
also
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gurantee
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guarantees
 reliable and healthier
food
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 .

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grammar
Fix grammar and spelling mistakes. Use simple, correct sentences. Pay attention to subject-verb and plural forms.
structure
Use clear topic sentences. Start each paragraph with a main idea and then add a bit of detail.
coherence
Keep ideas small and linked. Use linking words like 'for example', 'also', 'but', and 'and' to connect thoughts.
lexis
Use common words when you can. Change 'domestic food' to 'home-cooked meals'.
content
Avoid strong claims without proof. If you mention illness, make it believable or keep it general.
grammar
Check spelling and punctuation. For example, 'its' vs 'it's' and 'wether' -> 'whether'.
content
Clear choice is stated at the start and restated at the end.
coherence
Some linking words show contrast and addition.
ideas
Personal touch with memory and family adds interest.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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