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The chart below gives information on the precentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the precentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the information on the proportion of British people donating to charity by age range between 1990 and 2010.
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, in 1990, the highest rate of donating was between 26-35
years
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. In 2010, the largest fee of donating was between 51-65
years
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. The lowest interest
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 donating was
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 18-25
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years
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year-olds
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 in 1990 and 2010. Between 1990 and 2010, the rate of
donations
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 by 18-25-year-olds dramatically declined from around 16% to approximately 7%. The bonus of
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 by 26-35-year-olds slightly fell from around 31% to approximately 24%. The fee of
donations
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 by 36-50-year-olds decreased from around 42% to 35%. On the one hand, between 1990 and 2010, the chunk of
donations
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 by 51-65-year-olds
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slowly climbed from 35% to around 39%. The
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 of
donations
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 by those over 65
years
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 slightly increased from around 32% to 35%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, donations with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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