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The chart bellow shows the percentage of car trips by purpose and genders in 2015.

The chart bellow shows the percentage of car trips by purpose and genders in 2015.
The bar chart illustrates the
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 of the
car
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trips
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 by purpose and
genders
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the genders
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 (
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woman
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women
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,
man
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men
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) of drivers
at
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in
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 2015.
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, in
2015
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 the largest
rate
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 of
the
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apply
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car
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trips
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in
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for
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woman
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women
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 and
men
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 was work. On the one hand, the lowest
percent
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 of
the
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car
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trips
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 was
bank
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banking
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 and running errands
in
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among
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men
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.
However
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, the lowest
percent
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per cent
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 of the
car
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trips
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in
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for
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woman
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women
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 was visiting town. In 2015, between
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woman
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women
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 and
man
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men
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, the
rate
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 of the course was
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woman more
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women
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 than
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men
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for men
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 at around 12% and under 10%. The
rate
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 of bank,
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woman
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women
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more
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are more
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 than
men
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 at approximately 10% and around 3%. The
rate
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 of visiting
town
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the town
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 was
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woman
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a woman
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, trips, woman, rate, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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