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Band 4

If countries are serious about solving traffic problems, they should tax private cars very heavily and use the money to provide free or very cheap rail travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the prevailing era,
traffic
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 congestion has become a grimmer problem around the world. It is an argued issue whether the government should impose
levy
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a levy
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tax
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 on private vehicles to alleviate the issue
and
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, and
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this
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 money should be invested in providing free and less costly
rail
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 travel.
Although
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 having
tax
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 on private
cars
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 can help to mitigate the
traffic
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 jams, I contemplate that
this
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 phenomenon will create some major problems in every corner of the world. On the one hand, having
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tax
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a tax
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 on private
cars
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 can probably reduce
the
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apply
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traffic
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 congestion because it can make the
cars
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 out of reach
from
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for
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 many
people
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. At the same time,
price
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the price
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 of the tickets
of
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for
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rail
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 travel is reasonable or free of
cost
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cost,
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that
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which
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 can encourage them to
use
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 the
rail
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 service.
For example
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,in
Singapure
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Singapore
, natives
use
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metro
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the metro
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 service
insead
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instead
 of buying a new
car
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 because of its cost.
On the other hand
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, I believe that having
heavy
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a heavy
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tax
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 on private
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car
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cars
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 cannot mitigate the
traffic
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 jams. The majority of
indiviuals
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individuals
are
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apply
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rely on
the
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apply
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cars
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 because many
people
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 work in
these
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this
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 sector
especially
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, especially
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taxy
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taxi
 drivers. If authorities impose the
tax
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, it leads to
increase
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an increase
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the
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in the
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 cost of hiring a taxi.
People
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 will still
use
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 the
car
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as
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for
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 commuting
by
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as
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them
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it
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 is more
convient
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convenient
 and time-saving
as
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apply
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compared to
rail
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 service.
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,
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in Canada
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, even though booking
a
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an
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 Uber
car
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 is expensive,
people
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 are still
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use
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using
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 it because
they
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it
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provide
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provides
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comfortable
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comfort
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.
To conclude
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,
whilist
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whilst
 having
levy
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a levy
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tax
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 on private
cars
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 can reduce the
traffic
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 jams, I believe that
people
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 are less likely to discourage as the
cars
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 are
convient
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convenient
 to
use
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 and save their time.

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content
Make your view clear in the first paragraph and keep it the same in the rest of the essay.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea and use a clear line to the next idea.
language
Fix spelling and grammar. Check common words and fix wrong spellings.
content
Give clear and real examples, and say how they show your view.
content
The essay tries to talk about both sides.
content
It has some examples.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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