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The chart below shows the percentage of people in a city in the UK using the Interner for different activities in 2007 and 2009

The chart below shows the percentage of people in a city in the UK using the Interner for different activities in 2007 and 2009
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 of people in a UK city who used the internet for various activities in 2007 and 2009. The proportion of people using the internet for shopping, banking, job seeking, games, learning and watching TV increased slightly over the period. The figure for games,
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 remained almost the same with very little change.
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, the proportion of people using the internet for banking, music, and learning decreased slightly over the period

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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