The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
The maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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information about the central area of Islip town's present and forecasted arrangement.   
Overall
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, it can be seen that the town will
undergone
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undergo
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radical transformations, especially in the
residental accomodation
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residential accommodation
and transportation options.  In detail,
according to
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the future
plan
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plan,
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the road will be expanded in size and constructed in
circle
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a circular
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form,
while
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all the amenities and
accomodations
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accommodations
will
surrounded
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be surrounded
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by it.
Moreover
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,
main
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the main
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road will be demolished and small shops will
replaced
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be replaced
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by a shopping centre.
Also
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,
new
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a new
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bus station and parking area will
installed
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be installed
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besides
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beside
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the mall.  
In contrast
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, in front of the mall
there
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, there
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small
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will be small
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local shop chains
will be
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apply
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added, and between them trail for
the
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apply
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pedestrians will
constructed
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be constructed
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.
On the other hand
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, the location of housing
are
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apply
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will be shifted to the north-west side of the road and
new
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a new
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residential
appartment
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apartment
will
established
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be established
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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the significant changes would happen for
benefaction
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the benefit
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of local people,
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conversely
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conversely,
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the size of the park will be diminished.
However
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,
due to
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increasing
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the increasing
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number of people, the school
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also
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will also
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be enlarged.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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