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The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides key information about the results of a survey of the primary
exercise
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 objectives of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. The pie chart illustrates where these people
exercise
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.The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the bar graph that there were five different reasons why people went to
do
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exercise
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. The highest proportion going to recreation represente 40%.
Next,
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muscle toning reached 25%. Individuals who are doing that to prevent a disease illustrate less than 15%. Weight loss and mood improvement had the same percentages, approximately 10%,
weight
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with weight
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 loss slightly above.
According to
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 what is shown in the pie graph, there were many places to
exercise
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. The gym took the highest percentage, nearly 35%.
Then
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, many people prefer to do that in parks, about 20%. Doing
exercise
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 in public sports venues, playgrounds, and other public places had the same ratio, almost 15%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exercise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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