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the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island betwen 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant

the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island betwen 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant
In the
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The
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 line chart below
,
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apply
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 shows the
number
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 of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean
island
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 between 2010 and 2017. There are 3 different
types
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,
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apply
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 there is;
visitors
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 staying on the cruise ships,
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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, and the total from
two
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the two
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 different
types
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 of
the
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apply
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tourist
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tourists
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 who have
visiting
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visited
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 a Caribbean
island
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Visitors
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 who
staying
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are staying
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 on
cruise
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a cruise
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 ship
has
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have
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 increased
,
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;
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 the fact is
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visitors
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that visitors
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 who
staying
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are staying
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 on the
island
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has
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have
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 the smallest
number
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 than other
types
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. From 2010 until 2017, even though
visitors
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 did not have a significant
number
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, and in 2016
this
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 type
have
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had
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 a reduction too,
this
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 type
also
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 had
increase
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an increase
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visitors
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in visitors
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 to 1.5
million
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.
On the other hand
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,
visitors
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 who have been staying on the
island
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since
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from
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 2010
until
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to
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 2017 have a significant increase, up to 2
million
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of
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apply
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visitors
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, which is a good development
number
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, before just
only
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apply
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around 0,3
million
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. The
last
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 is, the total of two different
types
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, from 2010 only just had
1
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only 1
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million
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visitor
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visitors
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, becoming 3.5
million
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visitors
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, types, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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