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Writing Samples
Band 2

Many efforts has been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. .What are the possible reasons for environment degradation? are there any solution to combat ? Support your answer with specific reason and examples.

To solve the
environmental related
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environmental-related
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 problems, a number of
effort
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efforts
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has
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have been
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 made by many nations, but still the situation is
same
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the same
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. The main reasons for these issues
is
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are
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usage
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the usage
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 of plastic
bags
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 and vehicle emissions. To solve these problems, people can give more preference to
recyling
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recycling
 and eco-friendly
process
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processes
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. One of the main reasons for ecological issues is the usage of poly
bags
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, because mostly individuals are using these
bags
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 for their shopping purposes, whether it's related to their clothes or
grocerry
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grocery
 shopping.
As a result
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, after using it once time they just throw it on the ground, and these
bags
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 are
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non-biodegradable
non-biodegredable
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non-biodegredable,
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 not only
create
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creating
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the
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a
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 harmful impact on the land fertility, but
also
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proves
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proving
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 dangerous for the land species.
Thus
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, above mentioned factor is
also
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 the reason
of
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for
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 environmental problems. Another main cause is the traffic congestion as these days people are using
there
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their
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 private vehicles,
such
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 as cars and
bik
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bikes

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task achievement
Plan your essay. Start with a simple idea of what you will say and end with a short finish.
coherence cohesion
Have one main idea in each part. Give one clear example and say why it hurts land or air.
coherence cohesion
Use easy link words like and, also, but to show how ideas go with each other.
language
Check spelling and form of hard words you use, for example recycle and grocery.
language
Use short and plain sentences for a clearer text.
strength
The writer tries to give the main points about environment and uses some examples.
strength
There is a clear aim to show causes and a way to solve.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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