The table below gives information about the employment sectors in which people from 3 age groups worked.

The table presents the number of people who worked in certain sectors, broken down by age group.

Overall

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, manufacturing attracted the largest workforce,

whereas

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accountancy recorded the smallest, remaining the least popular sector across all groups. Employment in agriculture rose steadily with age, from 5 to 9. Similar patterns were

also

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seen in local government and manufacturing, rising from 8 to 18 for the former and 12 to 23 for the latter.

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, the majority of those aged 40-65 entered manufacturing.

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, the legal field employed the same number of employees regardless of age, at 4. As for accountancy, the youngest and oldest groups recorded equal levels at three each, marginally higher than 25-40-year-olds at 2.

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, 23 workers aged 18-25 were employed in retail,

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only seven came from the middle group and six from the oldest. The health sector saw similar values across all ages, with 12 each for those under 25 and above 40, three points higher than the 25-40.

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, catering hired more people aged 25-40 at 8, double that of those over 40.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

180 words

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The table below gives information about the employment sectors in which people from 3 age groups worked.

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use.

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that natural ability is necessary to excel at sports. Others believe that hard work and practice is more important. Discuss both views and add your opinion.

Using a mobile phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become the distracted. Therefore mobile phone use by driver should be made illegal everywhere. To what extend do you agree or disagree?