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The line graphs show wheat exports in Australia, Canada and European Community. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs show wheat exports in Australia, Canada and European Community. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the amount of exported
wheat
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 in three different nations between 1985 and 1990, and the unit is million
tonnes
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.
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, the peak point was observed in
Canada
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 in 1988, and the lowest one was in Australia in 1990. The trend in
Canada
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 seriously fluctuated during the time,
while
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 that in Australia went down, and that in the European Community showed an upward
.
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trend.
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 In detail, the rate of
wheat
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 selling in
Canada
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 was reduced by a little more than 15 million
from
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tonnes from
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 1985 to 1986, before reaching
to
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apply
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25 million
tonnes
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 in 1988. It faced the largest downward
in
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trend in
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 1989, which was recorded at below 0.015 billion
tonnes
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, but the movement in
Canada
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 experienced a resurgence until 1990. The weight of
wheat
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 from Australia slightly increased between 1985 to 1986
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however
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 it
steadily was
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was steadily
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 reduced by around two-thirds of
previous
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the previous
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 amount until 1990.
On the other hand
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,
EU’s
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the EU’s
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wheat
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 exporting went up from 1988, after having a small fluctuation and a maintenance, which increased to 20 billion
tonnes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, tonnes, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • decline
  • rise
  • surpass
  • modest growth
  • significant
  • stability
  • comparisons
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