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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon and shows two possible sites for a new supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon and shows two possible sites for a new supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map shows two options to construct a new
supermarket
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 in the
town
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 of Garlsdon.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
industry
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 is built around the
Town
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Center
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Centre
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, and the
industry
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 is located in the southern and northern parts of the Housing area. The countryside
also
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 surrounds the
industry
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. Meanwhile, there are several main roads situated in all corners throughout the countryside from the
industry
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 except
the
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in the
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 northeast.
Besides
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, 65,000
people
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 live in the
town
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 of Garlsdon, with a significant railway over the
town
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. Looking at the map closely, one can see that the S2 possible site for a new
supermarket
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 is designed in the
center
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centre
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. It is easily accessible to all
people
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 living in the housing area, providing daily necessities for them.
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, it is convenient for the
people
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 who live in Cransdon and Bransdon. They can be along the main roads to the
supermarket
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, the distances are only 25 km and 16 km, with 29,000 and 15,000 population
respectively
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, respectively
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.
In contrast
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, the S1 possible site for a new
supermarket
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 is planned outside the housing area and in the northwest part of the countryside. It is considerably
easy
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easier
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 to reach
for
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apply
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10,000
people
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 who live in Hindon, with a 12 km distance.
However
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, its layout is not convenient for Garlsdon and other
towns
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townspeople
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people
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, affecting about 100,000
people
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words supermarket, town, industry, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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