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Band 4.5

You have recently been in a sports centre and noticed some issues in the changing rooms. Write a letter of complaint to the manager of the centre and say – What was the problem? – Explain why it is bothering you. – Suggest a possible solution.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to you after
getting
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 disappointed with the bad condition of the changing rooms of the Sports Centre. I want to raise a concern regarding the
worse
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worst
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 position of the changing room. The major issue
to
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with
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 the changing room is that the lock
of
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on
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 the door is not working. The players who want to change their uniform
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, specially
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specially
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especially
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girls
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girls,
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 get
embrassed
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embarrassed
 when someone tries to open it.
Moreover
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,
the
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apply
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one of the lights in the changing room has broken and does not work
which
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, which
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can be
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is
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 needed in
dark
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the dark
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. The
arragement
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arrangement
 of
table
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the table
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 or chair is
also
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 a
neccesity
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necessity
 there. It is a definite hurdle for me as well.
This
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 is because my sister in law is usually
go
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goes
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 there to do sports
and
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, and
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 any happening with her will cause serious disturbance to my family members. It can be solved by paying
to
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a good carpenter, I know one of those
which
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who
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i
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I
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 will arrange for the centre.
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, you can buy a
cost friendly
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cost-friendly
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 table from the
furniture story
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Furniture Story
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who
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, who
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 offer quality
of
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discounts, if you have any budget issues. I hope you understand the matter and act on priority. Your Sincercly, Anureet Kaur.

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task-response
Say what the problem is, why it matters to you, and give a plan to fix it. Use simple words. Put one idea per part. Check spelling.
language
Use short, clear sentences. Fix spelling errors like embrassed and neccesity.
structure
Make plan with three parts: opening, state the problem and its hurt, and the fix, then closing.
coherence
Use easy links like and, then, so to show how ideas go together. Keep each paragraph about one idea.
content strength
The writer has a clear aim to tell the manager about the issue.
tone strength
Polite tone is used in the letter.
content strength
The letter gives a plan to fix the problem.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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