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The chats below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts compare the average proportions of three nutrients in typical American meals
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sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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.
Overall
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, dinner contributes the largest shares of
sodium
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 and saturated fat,
while
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 snacks are the main source of added
sugar
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. Breakfast consistently accounts for the smallest proportions across all three nutrients. Dinner is the saltiest meal, providing 43% of daily
sodium
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 and 37% of saturated fat, and it
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 contributes 23% of added
sugar
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. Lunch shows intermediate figures, with 29% for
sodium
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, 26% for saturated fat, and 19% for
sugar
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. Snacks stand out for
sugar
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, supplying 42% of the daily total, and they add 21% of saturated fat and 14% of
sodium
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. Breakfast is the lightest meal, with only 14% of
sodium
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 and 16% each of saturated fat and added
sugar
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. In summary, dinner and snacks dominate the intake of unhealthy nutrients,
whereas
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 breakfast
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 and
to
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, to
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 a lesser extent
lunch
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apply
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,
contribute
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lunch contribute
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 comparatively modest amounts.

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task response
Write a clear view at the start and a short summary at the end, with good links.
coherence
Group the data by meal and show what each meal adds for the three nutrients.
lexical accuracy
Use the same words for the same ideas (sodium, saturated fat, added sugar) to avoid mix.
precision
Use a few main numbers and keep the rest as general trends to avoid too many figures.
grammar
Check small phrases to be sure they are easy and correct.
overview
Good overall view of the chart.
data use
Data is given for each meal.
contrast
Shows clear talking about how meals compare.
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