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You are applying for a new job. Write a letter to a former supervisor asking for a reference. In your letter: Describe the job you are applying for Say why you are qualified for the job Explain why you want a reference from this person

Dear George, I am Shadi Alkhatib. I hope you are doing well. I am writing
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letter
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 to kindly request a
reference
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 for a job that I applied for. As you know me from my
prevoius
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previous
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,
which
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 I
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worked with you and you were my supervisor for almost two years. Despite resigning from the company, I am sure you can assist me by writing a
reference
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letter
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 with a recommendation for a Sales Manager
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in
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 Dell Technologies. I requested the
reference
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letter
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 because you are one of the experts in the technology field
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also
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 most of the companies know you and respect your current
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.
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, I would like to request the
reference
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letter
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 from you
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 one week because Dell Technologies
want
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 to
finalize
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this
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 as soon as possible. Looking forward to
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 from you a positive feedback and
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 the
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. Your sincerely, Shadi Alkhatib

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task response
State the job clearly and name the company in one line.
coherence
Use separate paragraphs: intro, why you fit, and request for the reference, plus a short closing.
language
Fix spelling and grammar: 'previous', 'Yours sincerely', and 'please' or 'kindly'.
task response
Add a short line that shows one or two wins in your past work to fit the job.
tone
Ask for the reference politely and offer to give more info or a draft letter.
tone
Polite and respectful tone.
content
Shows the job and the company you want the reference for.
content
Clear request to write a reference.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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