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Writing Samples
Band 5

Your local newspaper published an advertisement asking people to help with enviromental projects in your area. Write a letter to the project manager to offer your help. In your letter: Describe a local environmental issue that affects you, explain what you would like to do to help, suggest how the problem could be avoid in the future

Dear Sir or Madam  I was reading the local newspaper
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while
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when
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 I
have seen
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saw
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 the advertisement
about ask
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asking
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 people
that
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who
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 could help
the
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with the
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enviromental
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environmental
 projects around my house.  I would like to offer my help, it will be so important for me and for the suburb. The problem that
affect
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affects
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 me
,
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apply
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it
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apply
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is the amount of rubbish on the street
, when
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. When
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is
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it is
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raining
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raining,
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 the roads
are getting
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flood easily
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easily flood
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. I could help you
on
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this
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 improvement
, let's
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. Let's
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 me explain how
,
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.
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there's
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It's
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 not a big deal
,
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;
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 we must
to
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bring all
this
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 rubbish and put
in
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it in
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 the right place, in the bin. 
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Therefore
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Therefore,
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 I got a
suggest
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suggestion
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 to avoid
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this
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these
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 problems, you could ask the council to spread some more bins around the area, it will
helps
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help
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 the people put the waste in the bins, and
also
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 another advertisement telling the population to
looking
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look
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 for the town.  Thank you for your time
,
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.
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 I hope that we
could
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can
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 solve
this
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 problem as a team.  Yours faithfully  Mateus Dal Osto.

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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar in many lines so the reader can follow easily.
structure
Use short and clear sentences. Try to keep one idea in one paragraph.
content
Give a clear plan of what you will do and what you want from the project manager.
tone
The letter has a polite start and end.
content
It shows a wish to help and gives a plan to act.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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