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The average number of hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart compares the schooling
hours
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 of three different levels of teaching
organizations
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organisations
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 in four nations in 2001.
Over all
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, the largest difference
showed
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was
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 in Spain, and the smallest one was in Japan. The American students’ studying
hours
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 gradually increased
by
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with
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 the level of education. First of all, Japanese students took 600
hours
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schooling
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of schooling
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 in primary
schools
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 and lower secondary
schools
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,
then
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 it slightly grew to under seven hundred
hours
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 in upper secondary
schools
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.
On the other hand
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,
a
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 same trend happened in Spain, but their upper secondary
schools
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 provided a little under a thousand
hours
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 of it
in
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apply
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annual
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.
Likewise
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, the teaching
hours
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 in the USA steadily rose
by
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with
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 the level of
schools
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, starting with over 800, which was the longest time among
four
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the four
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 countries,
then
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 ending up more than 1000.
Finally
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, primary
schools
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 in Ireland taught students
in
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at
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 the same level of time
to
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as
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 Japan and Spain.
However
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, Irish
students
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students'
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studying
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study
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hours
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 decreased from 800 to under
of
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half of
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 it
,
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apply
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 when they enrolled in upper secondary
schools
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.

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task response
Make the task clear. say what the chart shows and only that. Give a short intro and a short end.
coherence
Talk about each country in a clear way. Use links to show the change from one level to the next or from one country to the next.
grammar
Check the numbers and the spelling. Use exact hours and the word 'hours per year'. Avoid wrong phrases like 'in annual' or 'in 2001'.
content
The idea to compare four countries at three levels is clear.
structure
The essay uses a 'first, then, finally' pattern to show steps.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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