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The bar chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
The chart provides data about the proportions of inhabitants of
UK
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the UK
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 who followed the suggestion about eating vegetables and fruits in
fruitful
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sufficient
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 amounts in 2002, 2006,
2010
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and 2010
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.
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, the disparity between the rates of consumption of children and adults is noticeable
and
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, and
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 it is inevitable regardless of the year. In 2002, the percentage of 25
was
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were
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 represented by women, followed by men with 22%. Both of the figures experienced a slight rise
up by
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of
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 about 6 in 2006. The difference in value of children’s rates was noticeable, 11% and 16%, in 2002 and
2006
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2006,
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 respectively. In 2010, all the
indications
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indicators
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 witnessed a decrease.
While
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 the
quantity
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number
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 of teenagers declined by 2%, the men went down to 24%.
In contrast
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, the
figure
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number
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 of females
decrease
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decreases
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 by 5%.
However
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, they were more substantial compared to the initial year’s figures. The proportions of women and children were 27% and 14%
relatively
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respectively
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.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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