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Band 4.5

Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

In certain
companies
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,
workers
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 are given specific clothing to wear during working hours. The main benefits of
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 are giving
companies
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 a brand appearance and saving
employees
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time
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;
however
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, the key drawbacks are that
employees
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 feel bored and lack freedom when they wear the uniform. One of the advantages of symmetrical wearing and colour for each sector in
companies
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 is that it gives them an elegant and brand image, which has a good impact on customers.
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, a lot of
time
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 can be saved by
workers
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 because they do not have to prepare clothes every day. The
employees
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 can use that
time
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 to do anything or even rest.
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, most of the luxury medical centres and clinics have different
uniforms
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 for receptionists, nurses and doctors. The
employees
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 in
companies
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 with
uniforms
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 have to wear them.
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, they feel bored and lack freedom because they do not choose their
uniforms
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 and wear them every working day. These feelings have bad effects on
workers
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 that may influence their performance
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, which
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 is considered a main disadvantage.
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, in my country, some governmental
companies
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 have started to give their
employees
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 a chance to decide on the design and colour of their uniform
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. This
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this
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 small change makes them more motivated. In conclusion, wearing
uniforms
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while
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 working has been beneficial, as it is a brand image of
companies
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 and saves
workers
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time
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,
while
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 the drawbacks are that
employees
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 feel bored and forced to wear them.

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task
Give a clear main idea in the opening and a simple plan for your essay.
coherence
Improve how ideas are linked. Use simple links like first, then, also, but, so.
coherence
Make each paragraph start with a clear idea and end with a short note.
task
Add more simple examples to show your points.
vocabulary
Avoid long repeats. Use small, direct words.
task
You show both sides of the issue.
coherence
You use examples like clinics and government firms.
coherence
The end restates the main idea.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniforms
  • staff
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • promotes
  • belonging
  • team spirit
  • professional
  • cohesive
  • image
  • security
  • identification
  • reduces
  • expenses
  • employees
  • decide
  • wear
  • fosters
  • equality
  • minimizes
  • differences
  • individuality
  • self-expression
  • uncomfortable
  • restrictive
  • body types
  • sizes
  • maintenance
  • cleanliness
  • control
  • restriction
  • personal style
  • fashion preferences
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