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Band 4.5

More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicinr. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many
specialist
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specialists
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 from
diferent
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different
 fields like medicine,
engeneering
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engineering
 and
cmputing
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computing
 are
satelling
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settling
 down in rich
coutrie
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countries
 which are attracting them.Many
people
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 consider
this
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movement
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 as a
steeling
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stealing
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 of qualified workers. Others
,
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 think it is a logical
phenomen
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phenomenon
.
This
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 essay will discuss both
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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 of
such
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 a
movement
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 and provide my opinion. First of all,
people
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 who think that encouraging qualified workers to move to rich
countries
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 is a steal,
belive
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believe
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 that serving your
country
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 is a priority.
People
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 should pay back
thier
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their
 communities first by working hard before serving other
countries
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. They should share
thier
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their
 knowledge with their community
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for
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, for
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 example, senior doctors can share their experience with
jonior
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junior
 doctors before moving to any rich
country
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.
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, many consider
this
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movement
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an anatural
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anatural
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unnatural
movement
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 and it is not
a
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apply
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steeling
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stealing
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 by rich
countries
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. It is normal for
people
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 with high qualifications to be attracted by other
countreis
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countries
.
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 that those governments
do
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not only provide a high salary but
also
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 many other advantages like free health insurance,
accomedation
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accommodation
 and high standards of living.
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addition
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 those specialists who migrate to high economic
countries
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 can support the economy of
thier
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their
 original
countries
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 by
transfering
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transferring
 money to their families there. In
may
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many
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conuntry
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countries
 there are many
exparts
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expats
 who are
transfering milions
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transferring millions
 of dollars every month to their
countries
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. In conclusion, I think that
vacincies
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vacancies
 in rich
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country
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countries
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 should be filled by qualified workers from any
country
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. It is normal for anyone to search for a better opportunity
of
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for
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 work in any place.

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task response
Plan your essay. Start with a simple line that states your view. Then give two clear points for each side, with a small example. End with your clear view.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next. Make each paragraph focus on one main idea.
grammar
Check spelling and small mistakes. Use short, clear sentences.
lexical
Add one or two real or simple examples to show your point.
content
The idea of both sides is shown.
structure
There is a closing line that gives your view.
content
Some good ideas are in the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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