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For some people learning in a group is the most effective way, while others prefer one-on-one instruction. Discuss both views. What is your opinion?

Most communities
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 think that it's way more efficient to learn in a
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 rather than face-to-face instruction.
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 others say the opposite, that one-on-one explanation is better. In
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Firstly
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,
people
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 who like to learn directly face-to-face are more likely to save more
time
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. Because the atmosphere is quieter and there will be fewer distractions.
Moreover
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,
people
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 who like
this
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 method of learning will probably score high.
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, they still may find it hard sometimes.
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, if both
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 a question, it will take
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 to figure out the answer out which sucks.
Secondly
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,
people
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group
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 question correct.
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,there is a very low possibility of a
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people
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 that will get stuck on a question.
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, they
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 get out of the focus mode to laugh or make jokes for hours.
As a result
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, they may get sleepy or
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 have enough
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 to complete their work or assignment, which may have an impact on their
health
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As a result
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, if
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happening
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 it may have a significant impact on your
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To sum up
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, both views have excellent advantages.
Consequently
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, personally, I think that learning face-to-face is far better than a
group
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, because it saves you a lot of
time
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 and it doesn't cost your
health
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Finally
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, if a
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 have 4 to 3
people
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 it would be better for their work and
health
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grammar
Fix small grammar and spell errors. Use simple, clear sentences.
coherence
Use clear links between ideas. Use words like also, but, however to join parts.
structure
Give a short, clear view in the end. Sum up your main point in one line.
fulfils task
The essay shows both sides and a clear view.
cohesion
It uses simple links like First, Second, and To sum up.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative
  • peer support
  • groupthink
  • individualized attention
  • adaptive learning
  • socio-academic
  • pedagogical
  • interpersonal skills
  • customized curriculum
  • self-paced learning
  • cost-effectiveness
  • mentorship
  • cognitive diversity
  • capacity-building
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