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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
illustrat
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illustrate
 the
consumption
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 of
water
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, based on percentage,for diverse objects, namely, industrial, agricultural, and commercial uses. The
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 is
utilise
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 in 6 locations of the world: Europe,
north
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North
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 and
south
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South
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America
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, Africa,
south-east
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Southeast
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Asia
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, and
Asia
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 center areas. As it
gathered
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 from the charts, Europe and North
America
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 use approximately 15
percent
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 of
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 for doing
the
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apply
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households
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 chores.
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contrast
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contrast,
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near
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 fifty
percent
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per cent
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 of
water
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 is consumed for the manufacturing of products on
industrial
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an industrial
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 scale.
Water
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consumption
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 for the cultivation of crops in
developimg
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developing
 countries south
-
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east
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South-East
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Asia
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, Africa, and
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the middle
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middle districts
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Middle Districts
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 of
Asia
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 is 81%,84%, and 88%, respectively. In these three areas same portion of
water
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 is utilised for
home related
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 activities. But
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consumption
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the consumption
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 of
water
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 in industries
too
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is too
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 low in these states.
Most
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 interesting point is
difference
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the difference
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 in industrial H2O
consumption
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 in developed states
North
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, North
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 and South
America
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. South
America
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 only use ten
percent
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per cent
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 of
water
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 for
industries
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industrial
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 purposes.
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 continent uses approximately seventy
portion
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per cent
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 of
water
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 for farming of plants, vegetables, and fruits.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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