The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.
The
liner
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line
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graph
represent
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represents
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,
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apply
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three different kinds of crime (Burglary, Car theft,
Robbery
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) in
newport
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Newport
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city
center
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centre
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from 2003 to 2012.
Firstly
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, in 2003, the highest number of incidents
is
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was
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Burglary
reaching
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, reaching
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to
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3450, increasing to 3600 in 2004. From 2005 to 2006,
saw
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it saw
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a slight decrease to 2600
, in
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. In
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its next 6
years
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years,
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it fluctuated significantly lowest being in 2008
dropping
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, dropping
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to a whopping 1200.
Secondly
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, Car theft, from 2003 to 2005,
it
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saw a
steadily
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increase to 2750,
while
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from 2006 to 2008, saw an unequal
changes
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change
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,
overall
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it decreased
reaching
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, reaching
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up to 2400 in 2012.
Finally
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, the lowest crime
commeted
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committed
is
Robbery
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, between 2003 and 2012 it
keep
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kept
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fluctuating
reaching
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, reaching
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its peak in 2005 with 900 incidents
and
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, and
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its lowest
is
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was in
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2008
being
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, being
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500. and in 2012
reaching
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, reaching
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close to 600
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Robbery
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robberies
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.
To sum up
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, the highest crime
commeted
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committed
in 2012
is
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was
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car theft
reaching
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, reaching
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up to 2400 incidents. Second
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, being
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being Burglary
Verb problem
burglary
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reaching
Wrong verb form
reached
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close to 1400 in 2012. And
lastly
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,
Robbery
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with close to 600 in 2012.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words robbery with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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