The diagram below shows the formation of a supervolcano and the stages involved. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the formation of a supervolcano and the stages involved. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the formation of a supervolcano and the stages involved. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows how supervolcanoes are
formatted
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formed
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and shows all the stages involved, from the
magma
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slowly rising through
crust
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the crust
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to forming a
caldeas
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caldera
on the
surface
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. There are four stages in
this
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process, which will be outlined below.
Firstly
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,
magma
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,
that
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which
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comes from a layer of the
planet
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planet's
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structure called
mantle
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the mantle
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, is slowly cracking through the stable
part
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part,
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that
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which
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is named
crust
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the crust
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forming
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, forming
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a
magma
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chamber. Those are cameras with
magma
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that are
laying
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lying
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on the higher levels
earth
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Earth
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. At
this
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point
Add a comma
point,
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chambers are filling up and
became
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becoming
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less stable. The next stage begins when burning parts of
mantle
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the mantle
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,being under extremely high pressure,
causes
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cause
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a
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apply
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surface
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fissuring
finding
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to find
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its way out.
This
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is the part when
magma
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in the cameras
reach
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reaches
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the peak of
unstability
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instability
and the process flows into
next
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the next
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stage. At that moment eruption begins.
Magma
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rises up from the deepest earth parts right to the
surface
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through cracks and fissures
leaving
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, leaving
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afterwards lakes of lava and smoke clouds. The explosion can
lust
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last
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for months, years, or even centuries. At
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last
Add a comma
last,
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the size of
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magma
Correct article usage
the magma
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chamber is reducing.
Often
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Often,
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a land over the place of eruption suffers a depression
leaving
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, leaving
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crater
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a crater
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called
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a candela
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candela
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caldera
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.
Overall
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, the process of formation of
supervolcano
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a supervolcano
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are
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is
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lengthy
from
Punctuation problem
, from
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magma
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reaching chambers to eruption and
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the consequence
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consequence
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consequences
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for the
surface
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after
Rephrase
afterwards
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words magma, surface with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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