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This table illustrates the percentages of money spent on these four types of subjects in the United Kingdom year 1998.

This table illustrates the percentages of money spent on these four types of subjects in the United Kingdom year 1998.
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 table illustrates the percentages of money spent on these four types of subjects in the United Kingdom year 1998.
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, nearly all types of
the
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society spend
there
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 money
most
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 on food. We can clearly see that the younger generation
buy
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buys
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 digital and hardware music more than older people. Videos have the least number of buyers. Older people
buys
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buy
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 more essential stuff like food. Meanwhile,
youngers
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get
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people get
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 less
importnant
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important
 things like
vidoes
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videos
 and music. Looking at the table shows that videos
is
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are
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 not bought at all from older men,
woman
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women
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, and elders. They spend a combined 3.5
percent
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per cent
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 of their income
for
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on
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 videos
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, wich
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wich
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 is very low. Women
buies
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buy
 food the most. That year they
spend
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spent
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 almost 40
percent
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per cent
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 of their money.
boys
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Boys
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spends
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 9
percent
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per cent
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 of what they own.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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