The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of five major categories (
Food
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, Housing,
Transportation
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,
Health
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care
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, and Clothing ) in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
Overall
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, all tend to have distinct trends in the year 2009. Japan's best share is
food
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with 23%, and the United States is housing with 26% and
Health
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care
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reaching 7%.
Then
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Canada, the best share of expenditures is
Transportation
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by 20% and Clothing with 6%.
Firstly
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, the United States ,
while
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they don't give much attention to
food
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and clothing , being the lowest between the countries with 16% and 3%,
however
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, it's doing good with
Transportation
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being the second with 17%.
Secondly
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, Canada is
last
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in housing with close to 21% and
being
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is
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2nd in
food
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with 15% and
last
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in
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Health
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healthcare
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care
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with the 2nd spot by 4%.
Finally
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, the United Kingdom doesn't have any 1st place share, but it has 2nd place in
Food
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with 20% and Housing with 24% and Clothing with 5%, and
Transportation
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being in 3rd with 15%, and
lastly
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Health
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care
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being the
last
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with 2%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, transportation, health, care with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • expenditures
  • categories
  • United States
  • Canada
  • United Kingdom
  • Japan
  • 2009
  • spending habits
  • housing
  • transportation
  • food
  • healthcare
  • highest
  • lowest
  • comparison
  • overview
  • significant
  • differences
  • similarities
  • trends
  • summary
  • analysis
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