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With the help of the internet and television, many people are becoming famous. Is it a positive or negative trend? Include examples.

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people
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 are becoming famous.
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 essay will examine why
this
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 is taking the place. Predominantly, it is a positive trend despite a few disadvantages.
both
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 the views will be
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discussed
 before presenting my own opinion. To start with, social media
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it
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has changed the entire world
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 it helps
people
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 to become more respectable. In
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modern
society
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people
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 are addicted to social media because it has changed many lives by making it
as
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a great
brodcasting
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broadcasting
platform for many
people
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 to showcase their abilities before the world through popular services like YouTube, Instagram, and WhatsApp
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 creators use these services to attract audiences
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,
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for
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by uploading their content.
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, Dhruv Rathee has
became
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 a successful YouTuber in less than a decade and provided many
education related
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 content. On opposite of that, the internet and television nowadays
is
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 very cheap and many teenagers who don't even know the proper use are making reels
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, which
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arise
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leads to
the
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conflicts between other communities .
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, in Manipur, a child has posted a religious picture
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 resulted in violence. In conclusion, despite a few negative things it has included with numerous advantages to help
people
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 to show their abilities, which in turn makes them popular by showcasing
thier
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their
 inner talent to the audience.

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grammar and sentence structure
Work on full sentences. Use one idea in each sentence and link with 'and', 'but', 'so'.
planning
Make a clear plan before you write. Say the main idea in the first paragraph, then add reasons and an example.
coherence
Use a simple but strong link to show contrast and flow between ideas, like 'first', 'also', 'however', 'in addition'.
accuracy
Check spelling and capital letters. Use the and before a noun when needed and fix common grammar mistakes.
content
You chose a real life example which shows you know the topic.
stance
You give a clear position that the trend is mostly good.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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