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With the help of the internet and television, many people are becoming famous. Is it a positive or negative trend? Include examples

With the help of the
internet
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 and television, many individuals are becoming famous.
it
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It
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 is predominantly a positive
trend
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trend,
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 my view will be discussed in the ensuing paragraph.
Firstly
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 the
internet
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 and television helps finding the talent recognition ,Many people has a talent but it remains unseen or it may be seen by few,
Due to
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 unavailability of
such
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 platform to broadcast their hidden abilities before the society but in recent days
due to
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 development in technology there are numerous services present to show the creativities, using social media platforms, like , youtube, instagram and facebook, peolpe are using
such
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 apps to post their content,
this
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 in turn gains the popularity helping them to become famous.
For example
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,
khan
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Khan
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 Sir
patna
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Patna
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 has posted his educational videos
and
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, and
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 later he became a famous teacher.
Secondly
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internet
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 helps people earn more money by providing many online platforms for businesses where one can easily get rich by selling his/her product on e-commerce websites, like
,
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apply
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 Amazon,
Flipcart
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Flipkart
, and OLX , by advertising their product
On
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on
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 their mainstream channels,
for
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example
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example,
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 many
you tuber
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YouTubers
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 promote products in their channels so that it becomes popular and sells fast. In conclusion, apart from a few negative points, the television and
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internet
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the internet
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 help people to recognise their hidden abilities by providing them a stable platform ,
as well as
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 making them richer .

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Grammar and punctuation
Fix long runs by using full stops. Put one idea in one line or two short lines. This helps readers read with ease.
Structure
Make a simple plan before writing: one line for your view at start, two body ideas with one fact each, and a short ending.
Coherence
Use small link words to guide the reader. Words like First, Also, Then, Finally help connect ideas.
Content
For each idea, give one clear example that fits the idea.
Vocabulary and spelling
Choose easy and common words. Check common spellings and keep the word not too hard.
Idea
The view on the topic is clear.
Content
The writer uses an example to show the point.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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