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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
The given schemes illustrate the developments that have happened near the waterfront
area
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, in
a
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apply
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Darwin's city from 2009 to 2014. Throughout the years, the government has converted the
area
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 into a
touristic
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tourist
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parkland
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park
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 with many trees and clean air. In
central
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the central
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area
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 of the waterfront in 2009,
was
Correct pronoun usage
it was
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 considered an industrial zone,
in addition
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 to a lake and some trees.
While
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, southern parts of the
area
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 were industrial zones with residential buildings near
it
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them
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. Along the river, there was a pair of swimming
pool
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pools
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 and
fishing
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a fishing
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area
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 . Over the period shown, many areas
has
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have
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 changed
,
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 and
demolished
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been demolished
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. Starting from industrial places as it
Verb problem
was dimolished
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dimolished
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demolished
 entirely
;
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,
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 the
southren
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southern
 industrial
area
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 was replaced with
natural
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a natural
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 garden, and more residential
infrastuctures
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infrastructures
.
Whereas
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 the
northen
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northern
area
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 was cleared, and turned into a swimming pool. adjacent to the housing
area
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, the authorities started to build
a
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an
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 academic institution.
Nonetheless
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, a Harbour was built near the river in the
southern east
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southeast
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 of the map.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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