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In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays. What is the value of long school holidays? What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Nowadays, there is a lot of
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debate
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 about long
holidays
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 and there are some people
believe
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who believe
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on
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in
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this
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 idea.
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,
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 others argue about
this
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 idea.
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addition
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addition,
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 there
is
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are
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not
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no
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a
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apply
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universal
holidays
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 even in
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length. So every country has a schedule for their
holidays
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.  On the one hand, there are many countries
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that put
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 more than two months for
holydays
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holidays
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 because they believe it will help
students
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 to refresh themselves and spend some
time
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 with their family and
do
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take
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 trips with them and spend
time
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 with friends.
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, if the
holidays
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are long
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long
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long,
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 it will help
students
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for
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prepare for
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 prep to the next year. It
also
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give
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gives
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 them
time
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 to balance between joy and even get benefits from it.
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,
long
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a long
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 vacation
give
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gives
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 the student space to develop their hobbies and
also
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give
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gives
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 them extra
time
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 to join
to
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workshops
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as
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; as
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 a
result
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result,
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 it would help them to improve their skills.
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, there are many reasons for shorter
holidays
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. One
if
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of
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 them, some
students
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 don't manage their
holidays
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 and waste it on stay a long midnight and watching
unusefull
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useless
 things
and
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, and
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 sometimes it
will lose
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can distract
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 them
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from the
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the
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their
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 focus because they are
in
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on
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their
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apply
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holidays
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holiday
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just
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, just
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play
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playing
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 without any benefit
of
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to
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 it and the main reason their parents don't look after them.
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, in my country we have
a
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apply
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short
holidays
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 because they
went
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want
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 us to adjust to academic
live
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life
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.  In
counclusion
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conclusion
, if the
students
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 manage their
holidays
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 in
good
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a good
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ways
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way
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 and
to
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apply
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improve their
skills
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skills,
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 it will be a wonderful idea. But
also
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 short vacations
it
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, it
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 will
helpe
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help
students
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 to
be
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concentration
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 most of the
time
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.

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task response
In task work, say your clear view at the start and keep it to the end. Give ideas for both sides but end with what you think.
coherence
Make the flow clear with small links like first, also, but, and to. Use short, plain sentences so the reader sees the plan.
content
You try to cover both sides of the issue.
structure
You use on the one hand and on the other hand to show contrast.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • long holidays
  • short holidays
  • summer break
  • rest
  • health
  • family time
  • travel
  • reading
  • learning
  • memory
  • gaps
  • exams
  • curriculum
  • planning
  • cost
  • money
  • parent
  • teacher
  • student
  • school
  • summer school
  • enrichment
  • activities
  • schedule
  • fairness
  • access
  • inequality
  • support
  • spare time
  • staggered holidays
  • intersession
  • balance
  • policy
  • example
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