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Writing Samples
Band 2

Traffic problem is the problem of every country. What solutions can be done in society and individual level.

In recent years, the issue of traffic
congection
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congestion
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has become
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major
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a major
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 problem in the global arena.The governments should
be
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apply
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make a drastic change for
this
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 problem.In
this
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essey
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essay
 we will discuss and find some solutions for it.
the
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last
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 two decades
in
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, in
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 some countries number of
cars
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increase
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has increased
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 dramatically.Researchers show that each family
posses
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possesses
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 at least 2 or 3
cars
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and
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, and
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 they
account for
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attribute
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 it
with
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to
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lack
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a lack
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 of public transportation.People need
cars
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 for their job,
drop
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of
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off
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 children
to
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at
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 school and without
own
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their own
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 car
it
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, it
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 would be challenging to handle
with
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apply
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these problems .
On the other hand
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,
usage
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using
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 more
car
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cars
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 causes different problems,
such
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 as global warming,air pollution,
noise
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and noise
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 pollution. Every single day quantity of carbon footprint is approximately
2 00000
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2,00000
ton
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tons
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. In my view of point ,
government
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the government
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 should make urgent decisions to
prevent
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protect
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environment
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the environment
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.Some strict rules,
banned of
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banning
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cars
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 working with oil fuel would be
first
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the first
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 step.Individuals
also
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 must
utilize
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utilise
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 public transport.
to
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To
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 tackle
with
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apply
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traffic problems
countries
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, countries
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construction
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 new routes is of Paramount importance.
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 ,pick times might be
solve
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solved
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 with changing work
load
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workload
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.
To sum up
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, l strongly believe that
,
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apply
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 the governments and citizens can solve
this
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 problem with
collobaretion
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collaboration
.

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structure
Plan a clear start. State the problem and your view in one sentence. Then give two to three ideas and finish with a short end.
structure
Make each idea a new paragraph. Use one point per paragraph and link with simple words like and, but, also, so.
grammar
Check noun and verb form. Use 'traffic congestion' instead of wrong spell. Say 'governments' has s. Watch plural and 'is/are' use.
content
Use simple facts or small examples to back up each point, like 'more buses' or 'less cars' to show good idea.
vocabulary
Use clear and easy words. Do not use hard words. Use short sentences.
content
The topic is kept about traffic and its effect.
content
Some ideas such as use of public transport and plan to limit cars are good.
content
The writer shows a view that the problem is serious and needs action.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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