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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You have heard that one of your friends will be doing voluntary work at a festival. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ask about what type of festival your friend is volunteering at and when and where it will take place ask what your friend will have to do as part of the voluntary work ask if the organisers are still looking for more volunteers and how you can apply for the work

Dear Pat, I hope you are doing well in your life and studies. I am writing
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 to ask you about the voluntary work at a festival that you are enrolled in for
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 year's celebration. I am very much interested in joining the voluntary opportunity.
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, I have no experience or idea about the event. Can you please provide some more information about it? Like, a type of festival, time, and location.
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, in what position or role will you be serving duty
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 Apart from that, can you please check with your organiser if they are looking for more volunteers, and meanwhile, can you please share the website link or contact information to apply for the work
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 I hope to hear back from you! Thank you for your help Yours dearest, Vishv

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task response
Your letter asks all the right things about the festival and how to join. It shows a clear purpose.
coherence
Some sentences are long or mixed up. Break long parts into short lines and give one idea per line or sentence.
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You ask for the type, time, place, role, and how to apply. This shows the letter has a clear goal.
coherence
The tone is polite and friendly.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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