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Band 5

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is nothing individuals can do to make the environment better. The only ones who have an impact are large
communitys
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communities
 and governments. Even though some people definitely agree with the given opinion, others may absolutely disagree with it.
Firstly
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, massive changes are not the only ones that can have a significant
contact
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impact
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 on the environment.
For instance
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, by choosing to drive public transport in your daily habits, you are already reducing the amount of carbon dioxide
that is
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 being released
in
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into
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 the atmosphere. There are about 40 seats in a regular bus,
hence
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 40 individuals have a big
brunt
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burden
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 on making our world a better place.
Secondly
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, by choosing to use no-plastic packaging, society can
also
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, clearly, make a big impact on our environment. As there have been many cases where turtles were killed by plastic
staraws
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straws
 and oceans polluted with plastic bags, it is significantly important
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 where your thrown-away trash is going to end up.
Thirdly
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, another point to consider is the impact that large
party
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parties
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 and governments can have on
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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. One clear example is, again, these non-environmentally friendly packagings, which are produced by large teams. If the government prohibits the use of plastic in containers and companies stop producing it, the problem can be solved more effectively.
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, people will have no choice but to use eco wraps.
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, I agree that some individuals might have a much bigger clash on slowing down global warming, but if everyone puts a slight effort into making some changes in their daily lifestyle, society will be as important as the government.

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The essay does not show a clear view from start to end. State your view clearly in the opening and keep it in mind as you write. Use a simple plan in the intro and end with a short wrap up.
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The flow of ideas is not always clean. Use simple link words (for example, also, but, because, in addition) and put one main idea in each paragraph. Start each body with a topic sentence.
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Choose common words. Fix spelling and use words you know well. Check small errors like 'community' and 'plastic' in your text.
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Watch building of sentences. Use proper grammar with subject-verb and tense. Try to avoid long, mixed lines.
content
You give some real examples like bus use and plastic waste.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion in the essay.
content
You try to keep a line of view about the issue.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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