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he graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the alteration of
population
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 in
India
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 and
China
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 from 2000, and
projection
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the projection
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 of
population
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growth
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 until 2050.
Overall
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, both
China
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 and
India
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 experienced an upward pattern in
population
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growth
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 during the period, and
India
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's
population
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 will surpass
China
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at the end
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 of the period. First of all,
China
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's
population
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 accounted for more than 1.2 billion in 2000, higher than
India
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. After one decade,
Chinese
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the Chinese
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 people grew to approximately 100
millions
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million
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 people, and continued to increase in the next 10 years.
However
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, based on projection data, Chinese people will experience zero
growth
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in
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 2025 to 2030. Evidently, the
population
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 will decrease in 2040, and it will continue to drop in 2050.
On the other hand
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,
India
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has
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had a population of
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 1
billions
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billion
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population
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apply
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in the initial year, below the
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China
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Chinese
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population
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. After one decade, the
population
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 grew almost 20 per cent, and it surged significantly until
surpass
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surpassing
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China
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China's
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population
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 in 2030.
At the end
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 of the period, the
growth
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 of
India
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's
population
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 will be approximately 1.6 billion.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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