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The line graph compares the number of goods transported to the UK by four various modes of transportation in the years 1974 to 2002. Data are expressed in million of tonnes.

The line graph compares the number of goods transported to the UK by four various modes of transportation in the years 1974 to 2002. Data are expressed in million of tonnes.
The data presents the
amount
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 of
goods
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trasnported
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transported
 to
UK
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the UK
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 by four different
ways
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modes
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 of transportation from 1974 to 2002.
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, all types of
transports
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transport
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 have had a
rise
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 in the
amount
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 of
goods
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 transported. The road and pipeline have had an even
rise
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 during the years, but water and rail have had a more uneven
rise
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. The pipeline had an increase in the years 1974 to 1986, despite having a decrease from 1990 to 1994, it still
in
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2002 had a higher
amount
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 of
goods
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 transported than
initially
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. The same goes
with
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for
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 the road, it has had an even
rise
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of
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in
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 delivered
goods
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 from 1974 to 2002, having the biggest
amount
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 transported around 95 million tonnes. The transportation mode of rail had a decline from the year 1974 to 1994, having the biggest decrease compared to the other
ways
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modes
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, when compared to its own number
initially
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, but in the year 2002 still standing around the same number
than
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as
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 in the beginning, around 40 million tonnes. The mode of water
also
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 had an uneven
rise
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, having an incline in the year 1978 to 1990, continuing with a big decrease till around 1994, but still
at
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in
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 2002 standing with
higher
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a higher
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amout
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amount
 of
goods
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 delivered than
initially
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, because of the growth in numbers from around 1994 till 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, goods, rise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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