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The table below shows the change in the number of full-time Indian university students at six British universities between the academic years 2020/21 and 2021/22. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the change in the number of full-time Indian university students at six British universities between the academic years 2020/21 and 2021/22. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart gives a comparison
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change
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the change
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 in the number of full-time Indian students at several universities in the UK between 2000 and 2022.
Overall
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, it is obvious that
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 Indian students
had
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have had
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 more attraction to the UK universities over the years. In the first given period, three of the educational
instution
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institutions
 were dominantly
leader
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led
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 (Coventry, Greenwich, BPP). In the first academic
year
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year,
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 BPP
was
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apply
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record
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 a significant
amount
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number
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 of
student
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students
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, which figures the highest numbers. Greenwich and Coventry followed it.
In contrast
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, the biggest amount of change in numbers
seen
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was seen
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in
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the
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Coventry
University
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.
While
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 Sheffield shows the best
increasing
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increase
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for
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in
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 percentages. In
2021
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the 2021
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/22 period, the biggest change
seen
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was seen
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in
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the
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Sheffield
University
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. It became almost two times higher than the past academic year
while
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placeing
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placing
 over the Leicester
University
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.
Also
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,
lowest
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the lowest
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 growth
seen
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was seen
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 by the BPP
University
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by
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at
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 40.6%.
Whereas
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 it
were
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was
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 the second most popular school for Indıan students.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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