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Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skill such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Learning some
skills
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 and academic
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success
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, and
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 passing examinations is
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a topic
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 to discuss in many countries.
I'm
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 strongly agree with the idea that it's better
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for to
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to schools
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schools to
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 focus on
devolop
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developing
 academic
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matter
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matters
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insted
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instead
some
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of some
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 public
skill
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skills
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, like carpentry, cooking and dressmaking. On the one hand, investing
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field
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the field
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 of
sience
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science
matter
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 can be
stepping
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a stepping
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 stone in
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a stiudent
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stiudent
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student's
 life and it can change their life for the better, and passing their exams with flying
colors
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colours
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 can provide them a lot of
jop
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job
oppertunity
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opportunities
, build their confidence more
stronger
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strongly
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 and even make a name for themself in the future,
therefore
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 it is highly
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beneficial
. By
this
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i
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I
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 mean that, educational
systm shoud
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system should
emphasis
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on
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apply
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academic
subject
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subjects
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 to improve levels of student
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knowledge
.
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,
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teaching
 some
skills
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such
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 as cooking, dressmaking and woodwork,
canamong
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can also
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provide students with an
oppertunity
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opportunity
 to encourage their creativity.
in
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this
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case
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 it has
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the potential
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 to
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cause
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to
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a sense of competition among students that
lead
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leads
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 to greater effort. In conclusion, I think learning some
skill
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skills
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shoud
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should
 be
do
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done
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in
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at
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homes
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home
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 by
parents
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 other older
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siblings
 because it may lead to
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creating
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 a good relationship between
childern
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children
 and
parents
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 and make them more closely, so
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basically
 I strongly agree with the idea that schools
shoud
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should
allocated
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allocate
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 educational
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matter
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material
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 and other
skills
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 learning at
houses
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home
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 by
parrents
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parents
.
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, in my opinion,
parents
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 should be more productive and give
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time
in
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to
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 order some
skills
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 to their
parents
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 and
educational
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the educational
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 system
teach
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should teach
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acodomic
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domestic
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matter
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matters
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 to students.

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task response
Plan your essay. Say your view in the first line. Then give two clear ideas with simple examples.
coherence
Make one idea per paragraph. Use topic sentences. Use simple links like 'also', 'but', 'so'.
grammar
Use short and clear sentences. Fix big spelling and grammar errors. Check a few times.
structure
Finish with a short end that repeats your view.
task response
The writer states a clear view from the start.
coherence
There is an effort to compare ideas and to end with a view.
lexical resource
Simple words are used and the text is easy to read.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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